After much deliberation, cajoling and coaxing by friends,I decided to accord some respect to my writing. Decided to clothe my random thoughts, scribbled on a piece of paper or jotted on a writing pad(yes, I still have access to paper and pad!!☺️)in a more formal ,visible and durable attire.
So, I debut with a poem written recently, which appeared on the horizon of my thoughts out of nowhere, like a dazzling albatross!
Gliding above the sea
Rising and sinking
Swooping and soaring
Dreaming of faraway lands across,
I am the lonely albatross.
Long white wings float
Shimmering in blue skies
Circling masts and sails
Of ships riding the froth,
I am the lonely albatross.
I know not that I bring good cheer
To the humble sailor dear
I fear no Ancient Mariner
With heavy bow and cross,
I am the lonely albatross.
Would love to lose to the azure
And feel the icy calm
But homeward bound by solemn vow
Inky eyes hide the loss,
I am the lonely albatross.
Beautifully rendered.
ReplyDeleteThanks Siddharth. Means a lot.
DeleteLoved it!
ReplyDeleteThank you. Glad that you loved it. Wish I knew your identity.
DeleteBeautiful debut composition carrying the 'jeewan darshan' through the tweet of Albatross. May your ink never dry and the journey of your poetry shoul move to the eternity.
ReplyDeleteCannot thank you enough, Vishwamohan for your encouragement ,inspiration and good wishes.
DeleteWell written lines. They seem like a sequel to ,"The Ancient Mariner". The Albatross resurrected or you can say the spirit that guards the south pole never dies. It keeps moving around in the hope to guide another detoured mariner....
ReplyDeleteThank you dear Saima. Being a good writer/poet yourself, you have added your own dimension to the meaning. Try to put in your name next time.😀
Deleteप्रिय रश्मिजी,सबसे पहले तो ब्लॉग जगत में आपके शुभागमन पर आपको हार्दिक बधाई और शुभकामनाएं आशा है कि जल्द ही अपने मौलिक लेखन के माध्यम से आप पाठकों के बीच अपना अलग स्थान बनाने में सफल होंगी।आपने अपनी पहली ही रचना में पाठकों को नये विषय की नयी रचना दी है।गतिशील और जीवट समुद्री पक्षी 'अल्बाट्रोस के माध्यम से आपने जीवटता को नये सन्दर्भ में शब्दांकित किया है।हालांकि मेरी अंग्रेजी बहुत कमजोर है फिर भी सरल शब्दावली से ये अंग्रेजी रचना मेरे लिए रोचक रही।एक बार फिर आपको मेरी शुभकामनाएं 🌺🌺❤❤💝💝🎉🎉🎁🎁💖💖🎀🎀🌹🌹🎈🎈🙏
ReplyDeleteरेणु जी,आपके इस "भव्य" स्वागत के लिए आभार और धन्यवाद। तोहफा,पटाखा,फूल,गुब्बारा,दिल...कुछ भी नहीं छोड़ा आपने।😀लेखन के क्षेत्र में बिल्कुल नई हूँ, आप सब का आशीर्वाद बना रहे🙏।
DeleteSuch a great depiction of philosophy of life, citing Albatross in the background of it, the ocean of words will fall short in describing the thought behind it. While welcoming, i take this opportunity to Wish Dr Rahmi Thakur a great success in the world of BLOGGER.
ReplyDeleteI also thank Smt Renu ji to introduce me to this blog and invite me to follow it.
Really, I have great expectations from this Blog....
Welcome and All the Best....
Thank you Mr Sinha for this cordial welcome to the world of blogging. Renu ji has been very kind to introduce me to veterans of this world.Interacting with you all will turn out to be an enriching experience for me.🙏
DeleteVery nice creation.You write very well dear Ma'am, you should keep writing and welcome to the blogosphere ❤💖💐🙏
ReplyDeleteThank you for the warm welcome Manisha ji.My writing is sure to get a fillip by interacting with the masters of blogosphere.
Deleteबरखा की रिमझिम फुहारें,
ReplyDeleteअम्बर के जगमग सितारे,
उपवन की रंगी तितलियों,
बादल में छिपती बिजलियों,
पेड़ों पे बैठे परिंदे,
और धरती के सभी बाशिंदे,
ब्लॉग जगत में एक सुंदर मनभावन कविता के साथ,
आपके शुभ आगमन का स्वागत
और अभिनंदन करते हैं ।
मेरी हार्दिक शुभकामनाएँ।
बरखा की रिमझिम फुहारें,
ReplyDeleteअम्बर के जगमग सितारे,
उपवन की रंगी तितलियों,
बादल में छिपती बिजलियों,
पेड़ों पे बैठे परिंदे,
और धरती के सभी बाशिंदे,
ब्लॉग जगत में एक सुंदर मनभावन कविता के साथ,
आपके शुभ आगमन का स्वागत
और अभिनंदन करते हैं ।
मेरी हार्दिक शुभकामनाएँ।
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इतना मधुर और काव्यात्मक अभिनंदन शिरोधार्य है।विशेष आभार।🙏
Deleteइतना मधुर और काव्यात्मक अभिनंदन शिरोधार्य है।विशेष आभार।🙏
DeleteRythm of your poem made me float and swing with the lonely "albatross'.Poetess has inspired me meet him!
ReplyDeleteThank you....look hard, you will find the albatross !☺️
DeleteThank you Soni (Shivani), Sharma.
DeleteEnjoyed the rhythm of the poem,Dr.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Geeta.
DeleteBeautifully depicted emotions through one of the most unique birds , the albatross. As a bird lover, i remember reading this interesting fact about them that they are the most committed lovers and prefer to stay with one partner throughout their life....strong endurance as they can live without touching land for years and can circumnavigate earth in about one and a half months. Loved your expressions . Thanks for sharing.👍
ReplyDeleteFrom- Namita ( PSC)- you've shared on our group🙂)
Thank you, Namita for the appreciation.Yes, these were the few attributes which made express myself through the albatross.
Deleteअनंत हो या शून्य हो,
ReplyDeleteरिक्त हो या परिपूर्ण हो।
सरल हो या कठिन हो,
तुम स्वयं में सम्पूर्ण हो।....nicely written
सुंदर उत्साहित करते शब्द ! धन्यवाद हिमांशु।
DeleteSoul of a poet in the profession of serving humanity, a rare combination of talents....you are special Rashmi... Don't stop keep pouring your heart out....
ReplyDeleteThank you.Sweet of you to say this.Next time ,please don't forget to add your name.
DeleteNicely written Rashmi
ReplyDeleteDon't know why, I find bit of 'छायावाद' in your poem
Got lot of resemblance to a doctor's life in the contemporary times .. दबी कुचली इच्छाएँ और बंधनों से मुक्त होने की आकांक्षाएँ और भी बहुत कुछ ...
All in all an excellent opening
Keep up the good work
Best wishes
Krishna Sahu
Thank you, for the good wishes and appreciation,Sahu. Being a fellow doctor ,you have an idea of where all this comes from. 😊
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